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Most memorable conversation in Episode 6 of my comic:

[Crator]: Eventually everyone will be on CeePee's monitoring
[Cream]: That'll be fun.
[Crator]: You're disturbing.
[Cream]: ...what's that sentence...
[Cream]: ONE. BIG. O--
*Crator covers Cream's mouth
[Crator]: I thought we had censors for that.
[Cream]: Hey, by stating that, you're breaking the fourth wall, right?
[Crator]: ...ummmm... no...
[Cream]: Wait, what were we talking about?
-end of episode

Episode 7~

[Cream]: Hey there, Crator...
[Crator]: You called?
[Cream]: Yeah. There's a couple of things...
[Cream]: Try this.
*shoves a forkful of cake to Crator's face.*
[Crator]: Cweytahh wants moee!
[Cream]: Glad you like it! It's my home-made Creamy Cake.
[Cream]: You look so cute all the sudden.
[Cream]: Here, you can take all of it~
[Crator]: Nu-thanks, Cweem. Maybe later. Whats in that stuff?
[Cream]: Suit yourself.
[Cream]: Let see... There's Vanilla Ice Cream, Vanilla Icing, the Cake mix is mixed with Vanilla Flavoring.
[Cream]: White Chocolate too!
[Crator]: VANILLA OVERLOAD!
[Crator]: With White Chocolate?!
[Crator]: Uh-oh! I made a pee-pee.

Garo: What a bunch of children.

[Cream]: That's not like you! Something tells me that you're hiding something tells me that you're hiding something.
[Crator]: I don't tell ya' a lot of things, either...
[Cream]: ... *groan*
[Cream]: I'll take this!
*grabs Crator*
[Crator]: WOAH!!
[Crator]: I'm not in the mood, Cream!
[Cream]: Who said I'd ask? That live and young body of yours...
[Crator]: Uwaaa... Don't molest me here, Cream!
[Cream]: It's not molesting, it's caressing!
*licks Crator by the ear*
*loosens Crator's Collar Cape*
[Crator]: Ah! Cream! Are you out of your mind?! Stop it!
[Cream]: You're turned on by this?

Garo: ...
Garo: What a bunch of sexually aroused children.

Aquamancia: I think these conversations aren't exactly what you'd call memorable. Then again, your mileage may vary.

This thread is silly.

In order to understand most of such conversation one has to have an actual context as to what the convo is about.

It's quite egocentric of an author, who does have this context, to expect the oblivious reader to find them good or memorable.


For example, reading the first post I had a few questions.

Who is Cream?
Who is Crator?
What is CeePee?
Why would it be fun to be on it's monitoring?
Why is mentioning this disturbing?
Why are those characters breaking the fourth wall?
Is this unusual for them?
What was the memorable part?

You can't expect people to understand something without any prior exposition and even then, the majority is who decides what's memorable or not, otherwise the topic is directed solely towards your self-gratification with your work.
And that is just. Silly.

AlexMdle wrote:This thread is silly.

In order to understand most of such conversation one has to have an actual context as to what the convo is about.

It's quite egocentric of an author, who does have this context, to expect the oblivious reader to find them good or memorable.


For example, reading the first post I had a few questions.

Who is Cream?
Who is Crator?
What is CeePee?
Why would it be fun to be on it's monitoring?
Why is mentioning this disturbing?
Why are those characters breaking the fourth wall?
Is this unusual for them?
What was the memorable part?

You can't expect people to understand something without any prior exposition and even then, the majority is who decides what's memorable or not, otherwise the topic is directed solely towards your self-gratification with your work.
And that is just. Silly.

Take a look over there: http://planetcutezome.wikia.com/wiki/MainPage" onclick="window.open(this.href);return false;

In fact

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CeePee is an abberation Of a Database thing, I think.

*Clicks first link*

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Have read the both next ones.
Still scratching my head.

Storyception wrote: [Crator]: Uh-oh! I made a pee-pee.

If you find yourself writing this, stop writing.

If you find yourself using ~ a lot, stop writing.

If your conversations are juvenile at best and more often outright shit, stop writing.

I like to think I tend to offer constructive criticism. Looking at this, I am lost for ideas. Nothing can be constructed from this. Nothing good can ever come of this. Stop writing this rubbish, for everyone's sake.

Also your art is quite bad.