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Black Company is an idea that has been floating about my head for the last week or so, about an elite paranormal mercenary group set in an alternate Earth. This can be considered a teaser or a prologue, I lean more towards prologue then anything. Anyway, I have no idea if I'm going to continue it, but read if you wish.
Teaser: Black Company
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Teaser: Black Company
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Re: Teaser: Black Company
It's pretty good. There's a few errors here and there, such as "My team and I" should be where "Me and my team" is. dialogue is also separated, and not mashed into one paragraph. I'm sure there's more than just those two, since those are what really popped out to me. Also what Hyphen said. But it's decent, overall.
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Re: Teaser: Black Company
The Red Forest of Magic (Incomplete)
Just posting what little I have at the moment, will probably only be somewhere around 10k words, but don't expect frequent updates.
Just posting what little I have at the moment, will probably only be somewhere around 10k words, but don't expect frequent updates.
Formerly Haku1201.
Current Fraxy Projects:
F-Gradius
Project SH
Now known as a compulsive core abuser.
DC Universe Persona Names
Hero: Marietta Durge
Villian: Voivouire
Current Fraxy Projects:
F-Gradius
Project SH
Now known as a compulsive core abuser.
DC Universe Persona Names
Hero: Marietta Durge
Villian: Voivouire
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